We have a winner!
I have to say, when the first recognizable rhythmic beat came in, I was stoked. I always wanted that kind of thing going on in some of my songs, but I don't have electronic powers required to do so. Whether or not you did it on purpose, you really captured a Rob Zombie sound here. Funny thing, he just played a show here a couple days ago.
Now the whole song is great and dandy, grimey, industrial coolness until you hear the ending. What the hell were you thinking with such an abrupt and unexpected ending? I do some weird shit myself, so I can understand if it's symbolic or something, but it was so unsatisfying. It's like being totally drunk, having a ton of fun and then your friend comes into the room, making out with your ex girlfriend with his wank out. It's a total buzz kill. If it weren't for that ending, I'd give it a 10/10. Yeah, that's how bad that ending is.